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Post by Owl on Apr 4, 2009 14:55:54 GMT -5
it's not that people hate it (i thought it was great) It's just that no one's read it yet.
people probably arent reading it because it looks like one big glop of story. you might wanna post it in smaller parts.
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Post by ۞Quaalude™۞ on Apr 4, 2009 18:24:17 GMT -5
Hey Man , I Read The Story Ella, Garrett and Simone are cool -BrB I Dropped my Goodies - okii i,m back - oh yea The Story , You are a Good Writer - there are parts you do what i do Wrong - you let the ends of a Sentence Start because you are in a hurry to tell what you see in your mind while your Writing (The night it happened the world turned upside down. In the hands of three teens the world was) already your Introducing the Who What & Where . and we have 18 Words - it's Straight to the Point for Sure - but there was no Leading - ( Leading Keeps / Grabs & Holds The Attention of the Reader . You Roll on & your Sentences need to be Separated and not run the Whole Story together - Other than that it Is a Truly Great Read . And Thank You  QC Hey I made MOTM cool . |
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Post by goldy on Apr 4, 2009 23:00:07 GMT -5
thanks, this is the first book were i jumped into it, normally LOL, i spend like three chapters on the past.
Yeah, somehow the story and the way it appeared got screwed up, so i am gonna post it again.
Thanks for the advice QC!
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Post by goldy on Apr 4, 2009 23:35:35 GMT -5
There, there, all fixed.
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Post by goldy on Apr 5, 2009 11:44:02 GMT -5
*hugs computer* i would have fixed it sooner, and i had tried, but this site was running like crap and i could not fix it, some sort of miracle happened last night and i got to fix it! YAY!!
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