Post by Jacelynne on Feb 10, 2009 16:57:00 GMT -5
So, I'm writing a Vampire story. And it's WAY different from Stephenie Meyers, and anybody else's, which is pretty cool I think. So here's the basis of the story. Or what I have so far.
I used to be one of them. And with his help, I could become one again.
Iscille had been human once. And it was all good for her She lived her life to the fullest extent and she took her time doing everything. She was always the party type, and she had a major obsession with vampires. In fact, everyone she knew had that some obsession. But she did not know that the man she loved was actually a vampire. She loved him, and she knew he adored her. But after a fight, one bite to the neck was all it took for her and she was gone. She woke a day later, and she continued through life with no control over her lust for blood for nearly a decade. Until she came across the school, and it was human free, so she could smell. She immediately went inside, and found herself greeted by a school full of young and old vampires alike, and she realized she could belong here, so long as she never left. Until he came along.
I was always in trouble, and for the wrong reasons. I wouldn’t ever dream of changing my ways though, so why should this place be any different. Hope it’s full of hot girls!
Jeremiah was always in trouble. He was only 17 and constant partying and never ending one night stands had marked his reputation. A major playboy he was, he never concentrated on anything else. Besides girls, swimming was his only other passion. He was a champion swimmer until he had been kicked off his old team, for which he would never discuss. After arriving at the school, he meets Icy, a fellow sophomore of his, and probably the hottest chick there. She seems to be playing hard to get, or have no interest in him altogether, but he knows deep inside there is more to her. And he intends to find out what.
Daniel didn't know what words to use to describe her. She was gorgeous. A goddess to his god. A queen for his king. She was perfect. and he wanted her. That over cocky sodden piece of human flesh did not deserve her, and while she gave no i9nterest to him, he would not let that mere walking set of bone try and even place a finger upon her. He would thwart any and every attempt. Watch him...
Well. That took a good five minutes. Heh. So um, tell me what you think and whether it could use some work or not.
I used to be one of them. And with his help, I could become one again.
Iscille had been human once. And it was all good for her She lived her life to the fullest extent and she took her time doing everything. She was always the party type, and she had a major obsession with vampires. In fact, everyone she knew had that some obsession. But she did not know that the man she loved was actually a vampire. She loved him, and she knew he adored her. But after a fight, one bite to the neck was all it took for her and she was gone. She woke a day later, and she continued through life with no control over her lust for blood for nearly a decade. Until she came across the school, and it was human free, so she could smell. She immediately went inside, and found herself greeted by a school full of young and old vampires alike, and she realized she could belong here, so long as she never left. Until he came along.
I was always in trouble, and for the wrong reasons. I wouldn’t ever dream of changing my ways though, so why should this place be any different. Hope it’s full of hot girls!
Jeremiah was always in trouble. He was only 17 and constant partying and never ending one night stands had marked his reputation. A major playboy he was, he never concentrated on anything else. Besides girls, swimming was his only other passion. He was a champion swimmer until he had been kicked off his old team, for which he would never discuss. After arriving at the school, he meets Icy, a fellow sophomore of his, and probably the hottest chick there. She seems to be playing hard to get, or have no interest in him altogether, but he knows deep inside there is more to her. And he intends to find out what.
Daniel didn't know what words to use to describe her. She was gorgeous. A goddess to his god. A queen for his king. She was perfect. and he wanted her. That over cocky sodden piece of human flesh did not deserve her, and while she gave no i9nterest to him, he would not let that mere walking set of bone try and even place a finger upon her. He would thwart any and every attempt. Watch him...
Well. That took a good five minutes. Heh. So um, tell me what you think and whether it could use some work or not.
